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Environmental problems are serious in many countries. It means that the only possible way to protect the environment is at an international level. To what extent, do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, all the
countries
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 are facing serious environmental issues and people believe that can only be resolved internationally by giving little effort from all the
nations
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. I completely agree with the above-given statement and the reasons will be discussed in the upcoming paragraphs.
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, every nation should be aware of the actual cause of the environmental issues. The international organizations should make strict rules and regulations which are followed by every
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countries
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 very strictly and those who do not follow them should be penalized heavily. Every
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 has many industrial areas, farms, mills and factories where the production house is established which produce a huge number of goods and
materials
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 by using a variety of products and chemicals and due to these reasons environmental causes happen. Manufacturing products are good but maintaining industrial waste
materials
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 and chemical carrying out in proper ways is mandatory and the government should keep their observation over
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 very carefully.
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, All the developed and undeveloped
nations
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 should be facilitated by the government to deal with the huge number of poisoned gases carried out by industrial production which spread in the atmosphere and damage the environment. Government should support financially the
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 and especially the undeveloped
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 and provide them with proper techniques and treatment to minimize the cause of the issues and waste
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. Developed
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 can easily invest in advanced systems and mechanisms at the other side undeveloped
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 cannot afford advanced mechanisms and international organizations should keep their eye on
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. In the conclusion, every country should come together and abide by the rules and regulations made by international organizations
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 carrying out industrial waster
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 in a proper way can make
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 world a better place to live in and minimize the environmental causes.
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