Nowadays, many people have access to computers and a large number of children enjoy playing video games. What are the advantages and disadvantages of playing video games for children

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Nowadays people have access to computers and a large number of children enjoy playing video
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. We Live in the modern era, Computers are made our life easier, our heir nowadays plays televised
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technology has made much of the work smooth on equally we have advantages. and disadvantage it owns. children love playing televised
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still it has drawbacks. We are surrounded by technology. now hereby subsisting we all have a stressful life. perhaps
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is the main reason why parents are providing play station to kids as they no need of taking outdoor activities after long working hours. There are a few video
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as Sudoku which helps in brainstorming. Parents should arrange small group tournaments to play
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in multiplayer. Multiple ones
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very popular in Canada. irrespective of its advantages it has drawbacks
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one main and most important one is they get involved and get addicted to televised
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that impact on the studies they lose the focus on studies.on the other the hand physical fitness is equally important to academics
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if our children are not focused on outdoor activities that will impact on their fitness that leads to obesity, parents should balance all the tasks of their child. is advancing it is making our life easy
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setbacks. be swept under carpet it cannot from it
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