Nowadays, marketers have left no stone unturned to entice customers. Certain fast food companies and restaurants now tie up with schools to endorse their products. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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chain restaurants have invested a huge chunk of their overall budget into marketing.
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they have intercepted school canteen business, In an attempt to make young kids addicted to junk
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ramifications at an early age, and why there should be a complete ban on
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giants entering
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Chain Leaders
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they lure kids by giving them a toy along with a happy meal, unaware consuming
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will have long term effect on their
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are paid hefty money to open stalls on their premises, Greed takes over a child's
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special student discounts are given, so everyone can afford it.For ,example every Diwali st xaviers high school allow brands like burger king
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open their stall for a week. One always tends to forget about the
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. It has been proven, that the major reason behind obesity among adolescents is the consumption of fast
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Strict action must be taken against
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promoting
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products.
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, The Government of India have started a midday meals program, Where nutritious
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is provided to
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, and there is a complete ban on the sales of junk
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at
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. In Conclusion, the Greed of
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co-operate world is destroying the
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of our young
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there should be strict action taken against culprits found selling their products at an educational centre.
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