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The world natural resources are being consumed at an ever-increased rate. What are the dangers of this situation? What should we do?

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Nowadays, people are making use of
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global natural
resources
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 at an ever-growing scale. Clearly,
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 situation might result in many dangers that affect directly our lives. In
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discuss
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 find out the solution. The foremost dangerous thing of
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 case is the risk that citizens have to encounter.
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, that residents use natural
resources
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 constantly is able to bring in the extinction in vast numbers.
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, when there is an endless rise in deforestation, occupants will suffer from a lack of oxide gases .
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, their respiratory will be harmed a lot.
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, natural
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 running out forces people to find
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the
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alternative sources. Because the number of them is limited, citizens have to cut down on the amount of
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fuels they use every day.
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,
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 might worsen the resident’s living
standard
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, which dearly
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 people’s health. Obviously, both ourselves and the government must do something to improve
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 situation. The authority had better pay more attention by giving out
warning
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warnings
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 and
punishment
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punishments
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 to those, who exploit
ecosystem
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the ecosystem
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 abundantly.
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, they might hire keepers to monitor the regions that include natural
resources
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.
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, we have to be
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 of using sources moderately. Specifically, the conservation of
fresh water
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freshwater
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as well as electricity system
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, as well as electricity system,
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 always can make
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 contribution to the saving of natural
resources
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.
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, they may be replicated so that lives could become better and better. In conclusion, the earth’s minerals and ecosystem being consumed at an ever-increased rate can be the factor
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 cause the wrecking
citizens’s
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 health and worsen their lives.
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, both occupants and the authority can help to enhance the case by raising awareness of people and
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 laws come into force against the illegal exploitation of bad guys.
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