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Car onwership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now ‘one big traffic jam.’ How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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The number of
people
 who own vehicles increased speedily in the
last
 thirty years. A couple of countries are recognized as having one big traffic jam.
Consequently
, I think governments should take some decision to control using
cars
, alternative solutions will be discussed in the following paragraphs.
To begin
 with, the huge number of drivers affect the environment badly and rise sharply the percentage of traffic jam. I have some suggestion’s role for the government to decrease the number of vehicles on the road, they could build a fast road for
cars
 which hold 2
people
 or more, and avoid using
this
 road by
cars
 with one passenger.
This
 will decline using fuel and the harmful effect on the environment. The
second
 suggestion solution is to dip the
transportation
 fees and generate many types of
transportation
,
besides
 the buses offer a train with a specific time to leave and arrive without any delay. Discourage
people
 from using
cars
 is governments’ responsibility, they could but a specific time to avoid using car individually, especially in the morning while
people
 going to their job or to school or universities and when they are going home. Some
people
 prefer using their
cars
 because of the noisy voices in public
transportation
.
Therefore
, avoid the driver from turning on the radio or using his mobile phone, other problem female passengers’ phase is the annoying attitude from male, so separating between female and male in buses and train will help women to use public transport safely. To sum up, Government could build a survey to know what made
people
 prefer to purchase their own car
instead
 of using public
transportation
. After they improve public
transportation
, they will avoid using
cars
 individually.
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