Our personalities are predetermined as a result of our genes before we are born and there is nothing that can be done to change or character train. To what extent do you agree?

Many people believe that our personalities are predefined before birth,
this
is due to heredity.
Thus
, changing them is highly impossible. I do not completely agree with the given statement as there
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human
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. The following essay will discuss the various parameters in favour of my statement.
To begin
with, genetics is not only the factor
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describes human
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, there are other shapers of personalities,
such
as Culture and
education
. Specifically, Cultural and ethical values bring
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character in person.
In addition
to that
education
act as a basic foundation
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helps people to build their personal traits.
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is shy due to genes,
this
can be overcome by proper guidance through
education
.
On the other hand
, it is true that some genetic behaviours cannot be altered completely with
education
or cultural values.
For example
, some people are phobic
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dark places,
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, deep seas and many other things.
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is due to their inheritance property. Even various medical therapy will
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no output. To sum up, I would like to say that though genes have
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impact on human traits,
this
is not a valid reason to argue that character traits will remain
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life.
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