Children today play very violent games. This must be the reason for the increase in violence and crime in most major cities of the world. What are your opinions on this?

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we are dependent on technology for the majority of the tasks. It has totally changed the way we entertain. In the past people used to play games, chat and listen to stories.
However
, today
kids
are least interested in these activities. Some people feel that as
kids
play action games these days so they are violent.
However
, I contradict
this
statement as there are other reasons
also
for their actions which will be discussed in the following paragraphs. The primary reason for
this
violent nature of young ones is that these days majority of parents are working and give very little
time
to their children.
As a result
,
kids
feel frustrated, depressed and aggressive. For ,instance parents have very little
time
to check with whom their
kids
are talking, what they are doing and how they are behaving. The
second
reason for
this
bad behaviour is the action movies shown on TV. There was a
time
when films were produced based on some theme like love, romance and drama.
On the contrary
today the majority of the films are sci-fi thrillers with a lot of action. When a child watches
such
types of movies it gets influenced by
this
and tries to do
this
in real life. For ,example a movie was released some years back with the name Avengers and since
then
five more movies with the sequel have been made. In the
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end I will conclude by saying that there are many factors that divert the mind of the child. We cannot blame video games for the bad behaviour of young ones. We are equally responsible for
this
and if we want to save our future generations
then
we need to take out
time
with them and supervise them so that they do not get involved in the wrong things.
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