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Band 8

You will have 20 minutes to plan, write and revise an essay about the topic below. Your response will be judge on how well you develop a position, organize your ideas, present supporting details, and control the elements of standard written English. You should write 200-300 words.

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There is an ongoing debate on the timing of getting married. Some
people
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 claim that getting married before being financially independent is not a good idea, whereas some disagree. Personally speaking, I strongly agree that getting married before finishing
school
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 or getting a
job
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 is foolish. The
first
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 and the most important reason for my belief is that getting married before completing
school
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 or getting a
job
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 can cause a financial burden because couples do not have enough income to support their life. To be more specific, various aspects of life incur costs for married couples when supporting a family,
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 as buying a house or purchasing a vehicle.
This
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 can be established by a recent study by Oxford University, which stated that 71.3% of the couples who got married before finishing
school
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 or getting a
job
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 ended up with divorce as they do not have enough income to support their living costs.
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, the
second
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 reason for
this
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 argument is that getting married before finishing
school
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 or getting a
job
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 can limit
people
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's social networks, which is harmful to their future career development. To illustrate, those who are married must spend more time on family affairs than socializing with
people
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 from schools or the professional field, which deprives them of opportunities to obtain new information
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 conducive to the development of their study or career. According to the annual report of the Australian government, more than 70% of the citizens stated that getting married before finishing their education or getting a
job
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 could influence their social networks negatively. With all the points above, the conclusion can be made that getting married before completing study or getting a
job
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 is irrational due to the creation of financial burden and limitation of
people
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's social networks.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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