Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home,leisure and work activities. To what extend do the benefits of information technology outweigh the disadvantages?

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technology
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data science and
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social
network
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is one of the essential
factor
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connected with
human
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lifestyle, particularly in the current day.
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, it is thought that
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advance
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innovation will change human activities
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many perspectives. From my point of view, there are benefits more than drawbacks. In the
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paragraphs, the supporting reasons with actual examples will be outlined in detail.
First
of all, the up-to-date data
technology
can connect people together more than
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ages.
For instance
, the Facebook Company showed the report that people nowadays are connecting
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others
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more than
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past because the platform can help them find their old friends or relatives who have not connected for a long time. From
this
report, it is apparent that
information
technology
changes citizen
relationship
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in
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better way.
Secondly
,
this
sophisticated innovation supports people
profession
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activities by collecting the data.
For example
, the Google Company showed the report that many students can search the
information
more efficient because the website had saved and collected their searching history. From
this
positive evidence, it is clear to believe that the innovation of
information
technology
makes our work activities more effective and accurate. In conclusion, it seems to me that there are positive sights of
information
technology
changing our lives in many
espects
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respects
aspects
more than negative ways.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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