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Some people say history is on of the most important subjects. Other people think that , in today's world, subjects like science and technology are more important than history. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, a part of
people
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 believe the most essential course for pupils is
history
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, other societies believe in the current times
science
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 and
technology
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 are most useful than
history
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. I agree with both sides of view, in my way all of those can be useful for students. On the one hand ,
history
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 records important events and record the evidence in the past. Most students should know about that to develop the previous ideas. For more expression, the discovery illustrates the events of
humans
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, the process in different kinds of living forms of
humans
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 in particular times on earth.
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,
history
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 displays the process of creating
humans
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, tribes, continents, wars, peace and disease,
history
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 gathers a
lot
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 of information about early
humans
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 how to deal with those events. Today
people
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 take a
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 of advantages and experiences from
history
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 to solve their problems.
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 , in modern times,
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 and
technology
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 should be taught to students to improve society.
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,
people
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 who know about
science
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 and
technology
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 can get a good job .
History
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 may be informed
people
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 about the past but
people
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 can not earn a
lot
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 of money from that.
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, Rashid is one of
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a scientist
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scientist
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scientists
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 who studied a
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 about the past and
uses
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 of them in modern treatment with modern
technology
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. He always emphasizes
history
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 is vital as well as
science
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. To sum up , in the modern area, communities realize all of the courses are related to each other and it would be better all off pupils have information about them to develop the country.
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