Some people believe that our happiness depends on how much money we have. Others say that money cannot buy happiness. Do you think that having money is the key to happiness, or are there more important factors?

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question
that has been here since human
history
, While
wealth
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path
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life
,
others
will see it less related compared to other
reasons
. Does our
happiness
reflected by our
banks
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accounts
?. A
question
that
have
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been here since human
history
, While
wealth
may seem very
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cruel
crucial
to many of us in our
path
to
happy
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a happy
show examples
life
,
others
will see it less related compared to other
reasons
. Does our
happiness
reflected by our
banks
Change to a genitive case
bank's
banks'
show examples
accounts
?. A
question
that
have
Change the verb form
has
show examples
been here since human
history
, While
wealth
may seem very
crusel
Correct your spelling
cruel
crucial
to many of us in our
path
to
happy
Add an article
a happy
show examples
life
,
others
will see it less related compared to other
reasons
. Does our
happiness
reflected by our
banks
Change to a genitive case
bank's
banks'
show examples
accounts
?. A
question
that
have
Change the verb form
has
show examples
been here since human
history
, While
wealth
may seem very
crusel
Correct your spelling
cruel
crucial
to many of us in our
path
to
happy
Add an article
a happy
show examples
life
,
others
will see it less related compared to other
reasons
.
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