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You recently attended a conference and you would like to give a presentation about the information you gained by attending the conference. Write a letter to your manager asking for permission to give a presentation. In your letter: describe what type of presentation you have in mind what topics it would cover and how long it would take who should participate in the presentation and where should it be conducted You do NOT need to write any address. You should write at least 150 words.

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Dear
Mr.
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 Jones, I am writing
this
 letter to request
for
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apply
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your permission in presenting some crucial information that I gained by attending a seminar.
Last
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thrusday
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Thursday
, I attended a conference organised by
Institute
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the Institute
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 of Interiors and jotted down all key points of the meeting. I am planning to make a similar presentation in Powerpoint software with reference pictures that will be in a video format compatible with our
audio visual
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 system. The topics will be on designing compact spaces and green design factors which I thought would be quite useful to our company as most of our clients own small flats and offices and want their rooms to be environment friendly and sustainable. The meeting would take only twenty minutes time followed by a session clearing all doubts that the members might have after watching the video.
This
 video demonstration will be helpful to our members including architects, designers as well as contractors since they can present
this
 visual to their clients and persuade them to opt for
such
 designs.
Moreover
,
presentation
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the presentation
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 can be displayed in
conference
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the conference
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 hall because it would be attended by all department leaders and can accommodate almost everyone. I would appreciate
if
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 you could allow me to share my knowledge with the company. Yours sincerely, Amit Kapoor
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