Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education? Or is it the responsibility of the governments of poorer nations to look after their citizens themselves? Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and with relevant evidence.

The
citizens
of every state require basic facilities
such
as shelter, food and education. Rich
countries
have enough funds to take care of
third
world
countries
.
However
, some ascertain that it
the
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duty of governing bodies of poor
countries
to provide these basic aids to
its
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their
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people.
This
essay will discuss both viewpoints and suggest what's best for the
citizens
of developing
nations
. On one hand, the public
depend
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on
government
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the government
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in times of need.
Citizens
cast their precious votes and expect that the
rulling
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ruling
members will help them with simple
neccessities
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necessities
in order to live a good lifestyle.
For instance
, India is known for its poverty. But a recent study indicated that the slums are slowly being eradicated by the Indian
government
so that its
citizens
live a better life. In short, if the people need assistance with food, shelter and education, the
government
should not hesitate to serve its crowd and provide the facilities to its
citizens
.
On the other hand
,
first
and
second
world
nations
should share
its
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wealth with poor
countries
not only because they have enough funds but
also
for moral reasons.
This
helps both wealthy and weak
nations
to build
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an alliance
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alliance
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and can help each other in times of need.
For example
, during the coronavirus outbreak,
USA
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the USA
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helped many Indians reach their home country from Wuhan through International
aircrafts
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aircraft
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.
Consequently
, the Indian
government
helped
transporting
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transport
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Covid
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vaccine for free as a gesture of
thankfuless
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thankfulness
. To conclude,
although
, poor
countries
should take care of their people, in my opinion, wealthy
nations
must
also
provide help by funding the developing
countries
in time of need. By doing so, both
countries
will promote
good
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relationship
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with one another and there will be peace and harmony.
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