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Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education? Or is it the responsibility of the governments of poorer nations to look after their citizens themselves? Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and with relevant evidence.

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The
citizens
 of every state require basic facilities
such
 as shelter, food and education. Rich
countries
 have enough funds to take care of
third
 world
countries
.
However
, some ascertain that it
the
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is the
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 duty of governing bodies of poor
countries
 to provide these basic aids to
its
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their
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 people.
This
 essay will discuss both viewpoints and suggest what's best for the
citizens
 of developing
nations
. On one hand, the public
depend
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depends
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 on
government
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the government
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 in times of need.
Citizens
 cast their precious votes and expect that the
rulling
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ruling
 members will help them with simple
neccessities
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necessities
 in order to live a good lifestyle.
For instance
, India is known for its poverty. But a recent study indicated that the slums are slowly being eradicated by the Indian
government
 so that its
citizens
 live a better life. In short, if the people need assistance with food, shelter and education, the
government
 should not hesitate to serve its crowd and provide the facilities to its
citizens
.
On the other hand
,
first
 and
second
 world
nations
 should share
its
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their
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 wealth with poor
countries
 not only because they have enough funds but
also
 for moral reasons.
This
 helps both wealthy and weak
nations
 to build
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an alliance
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alliance
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 and can help each other in times of need.
For example
, during the coronavirus outbreak,
USA
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the USA
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 helped many Indians reach their home country from Wuhan through International
aircrafts
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aircraft
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.
Consequently
, the Indian
government
 helped
transporting
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transport
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Covid
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the Covid
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 vaccine for free as a gesture of
thankfuless
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thankfulness
. To conclude,
although
, poor
countries
 should take care of their people, in my opinion, wealthy
nations
 must
also
 provide help by funding the developing
countries
 in time of need. By doing so, both
countries
 will promote
good
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a good
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relationship
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relationships
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 with one another and there will be peace and harmony.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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