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With the fast pace of modern life, more and more people are turning towards fast food for their main meals. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

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The hectic everyday life makes more and more people opt for fast
food
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 as their main meal.
Although
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 home-cooked
food
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 has several benefits, I think the efficient way of fulfilling hunger with fast
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 is better.
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 is because less
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 is spent on
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 preparation and more
time
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 is left for more important activities,
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 as
work
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. Home-made
food
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 is preferred by many because it has several benefits. It makes it possible to control the types of ingredients included in the dish. The amount of sugar, salt, and fat in the diet can be limited,
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 the calory intake can be easily adjusted according to the need.
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 is especially important for those who aim to reduce weight.
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, the social aspect when making
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 together is
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 one important reason why some prefer
home-made
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homemade
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food
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.
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, I think the
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 spent when preparing these dishes is often laborious and should rather be used for other activities.
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 of preparing
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, the
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 should rather be used for more important matters
such
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 as
work
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.
The
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time
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 is precious. By limiting the
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 used in the kitchen
preparing
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to prepare
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 a lot of dishes, more
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 is left for
work
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-related purposes. By working more hours, more deadlines can be reached and potentially career and salary will improve. Take
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 a busy day at
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.
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 of using 1
hours
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hour
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 preparing
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 for
the
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apply
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lunch, fast
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 can be put in the microwave and heated in a few minutes.
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, these fast foods are not necessarily that unhealthy today compared to previously. To conclude,
although
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home-made
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homemade
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food
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 has benefits as it is easy to control the meals’ ingredients and
food
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 preparation can be a social activity, I think fast
food
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 is far better because the
time
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 spend preparing
food
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 can be used at
work
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 which is far more important.
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