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The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The two maps demonstrate a small town
centre
 named Islip, in its current form and its proposed expansion.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the plan is to expand and modernize the
centre
 to allow for more stores and a greater focus on new
housings
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housing
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,
in addition
new
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a new
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 establishment will be added with extra space for activities. Currently, Islip town
centre
 consists of only a main road which is running east to west,
park
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a park
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,
school
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a school
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, housing and a row of shops
that is
 along the countryside.
According to
 the proposal, only the school and the park will maintain their original position
although
 the size of the latter will be reduced. The most significant development will be the extension of new facilities
for
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 instance,
car
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a car
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 park, shopping
centre
, bus station, pedestrians and new
housings
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housing
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.
However
, there will be no more countryside as the plan show the correction of roads into a dual carriageway.
Thus
, the main road will be no more in use by the reason of the conversion to pedestrians only.
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