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Your family is going to move to another town. Write a letter to the Principal of a local school asking if they will accept your son. Describe his academic achievements and scope of interests. You do NOT need to write any address. You should write at least 150 words.

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Dear
Mr.
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 Jones, I am writing
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 letter to seek admission for my son who is seven years old
in
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 your prestigious institute. My family and I will be shifting to Boston from Texas by
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 month. We have rented a lovely duplex house
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Middle
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 Valley neighbourhood which is two
kilometers
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 away from your
school
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;
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, I was hoping if you would help me out with the admission procedure.
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, my son is a professional Chess player at
national
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 level. He represented his previous
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 team
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junior
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 class and won many awards in multiple competitions.
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, he is an intelligent child who can solve high
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 mathematics;
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, his principal at Texas
School
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 promoted him directly to sixth grade. In short, I would expect him to continue his academics from the same level and if required, the administration can take an entrance test to check his intellect and place him in the right grade as per the result.
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, he loves to play basketball, enjoys a healthy debate and is a confident speaker on-stage. I have heard positive reviews of your
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's sports coach who was a specialised basketball player during his young age. My son would be honoured to learn some skills from him at your academy. I would greatly appreciate your help and look forward to hearing from you! Thanking you Yours faithfully,
Mrs.
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 Bhatt.
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