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In many places, new homes are needed but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. Give your opinion with relevant exxamples..

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Migration from rural areas to the larger cities has resulted in an inevitable space deprivation for housing. A great number of suggestions are being provided by experts. Some people have found countryside area as a solution for
this
 condition, while others argue against that. The
offerd
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offered
offer
 suggestion has
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 own two sides.
Although
 living in downtown areas may be
prefebale
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preferable
 to residing in places farther, but
this
 suffers from disadvantages that enforcing humans to live in
a smaller apartments
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smaller apartments
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.
In addition
 to that, it increases the need
of
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 more skyscrapers.
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, you can usually find the most expensive and the tightest buildings in the industrial
niebourhoods
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neighbourhoods
.
In
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the
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 result of that, recently
government
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 has been trying to expand the living areas to the nature
arounds
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around
 the towns. For years, construction in
countrysides
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the countrysides
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 has been
viewd
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viewed
 as an answer for the problem of housing, but people are taking a fresh look at it. Several
campeings
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campaigns
 have been held by
environment's
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 protectors in
last
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 decades.
Porpuse
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Purpose
 of these gatherings is preventing
the
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harm to the habitants and specific species of those places.
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, various kinds of animals used to leave near Vancouver in
last
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 century,
that
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 all have fled to
the
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pristine nature. In my opinion, the disadvantages of destruction in forests are much
more
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greater than
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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 of livings in small houses. As you can see some clear
result
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results
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 about my idea
exist
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.
Saving
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countryside
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the countryside
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 needs allocating available resources around
country
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the country
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 based on justice.
Consequently
,
population
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the population
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 will distribute all over and we can save ground.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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