In many places, new homes are needed but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. Give your opinion with relevant exxamples..

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Migration from rural areas to the larger cities has resulted in an inevitable space deprivation for housing. A great number of suggestions are being provided by experts. Some people have found countryside area as a solution for
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condition, while others argue against that. The
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offered
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suggestion has
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own two sides.
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living in downtown areas may be
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preferable
to residing in places farther, but
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suffers from disadvantages that enforcing humans to live in
a smaller apartments
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smaller apartments
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.
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to that, it increases the need
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more skyscrapers.
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, you can usually find the most expensive and the tightest buildings in the industrial
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neighbourhoods
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the
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result of that, recently
government
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has been trying to expand the living areas to the nature
arounds
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around
the towns. For years, construction in
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has been
viewd
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viewed
as an answer for the problem of housing, but people are taking a fresh look at it. Several
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campaigns
have been held by
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protectors in
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last
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decades.
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of these gatherings is preventing
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harm to the habitants and specific species of those places.
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, various kinds of animals used to leave near Vancouver in
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last
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century,
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all have fled to
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pristine nature. In my opinion, the disadvantages of destruction in forests are much
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greater than
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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of livings in small houses. As you can see some clear
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about my idea
exist
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.
Saving
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countryside
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the countryside
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needs allocating available resources around
country
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the country
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based on justice.
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,
population
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will distribute all over and we can save ground.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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