Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbles and interests, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this Information may be relevant and useful. Others disagree. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Few recruiters tend to ask
information
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seeking the personal
details
of the
counter party
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such
as their interests and hobbies. It is often argued that asking for personal
details
are irrelevant since it is not related to the work profile.
This
essay will
further
throw some light on the reasons for seeking personal
details
from an
employee
is of utmost importance to the
job
profile. Primarily, While
job
interviews are assumed to be only focused on the professional and the
technique
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knowledge of a
candidate
additional questions regarding the
candidate
’s background, their family,
candidate
’s interest and pass-time hobbies
enables
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the
employer
to understand the
characteristic
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of a
candidate
and
accordingly
to select the right
candidate
for the right
job
. As per the study conducted by Economic
Times
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it shows 48% of candidates who are involved in some kind of sports has qualities
such
as quick decision making, are team player, has good analytical skills, can work under pressure etc. Whereas if the
employer
is only concentrating on the professional attributes of an
employee
it will be challenging for the
employer
to understand how the
employee
will handle the situation or how he/she will adapt and behave in a particular work environment. Personal information helps in understanding an individual’s personality and helps in landing the right
job
. For an instance, if an individual basis his/her personality is an introvert so a
job
related to customer interaction and building customer
relation
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will not be a correct fit. In
the
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similar way if a
candidate
who is pro-active and is a socializer will not be best suited for a data-entry
job
. To conclude, Personal
details
regarding a
candidate
helps the recruiter in understanding the
characteristic
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character
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and
hence
accordingly
categorizing the
candidate
basis their personal and professional information in the role that will be a better fit for both
employee
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employees
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as well as
employer
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the employer
an employer
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.
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