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In their advertising businesses nowadays usually emphasis that their products are new in some way

#businesses #emphasis #products
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most
cases
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 advertisement industries use high
atraction
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attraction
traction
 marketing for the consumer but as a
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market or
marketer
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 they have to generate interest in the consumer mind and they do extraordinary marketing for
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 to actions of consumers .
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 I agree that advertisement industries need new buyers for development and growth.
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 they
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have to focus on improvements of their
products
 and service they must have to think about consumers if
buyer
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satisfied
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from
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 the
products
 or service they will be
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a marketer
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marketer
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 of yours and they will do word of mouth and organic marketing for the company. Mostly advertisement agencies focus on attractions of customers and they use new ideas to introduce
products
 some times they give uncomplete information of the
products
 and only they give half of the knowledge and they only show positive points
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 fully disagree with it cause most of the people are curious about new things so they just use t habits of human for enhancing selling of companies to get new clients and consumers. In my ,opinion they should focus on the customer benefits
first
 mostly customers buy
products
 to fulfil their requirements but many time they see the negative points of
products
 which they did not see in advertisements.
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