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Advertisements are getting their way into people's lives. Discuss the effects of advertisements on people. Should all ads be banned?

The appearance of the internet and globalization has brought many
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 to our life. Especially with the development of the advertisement. It helps consumers approach products and companies grab profitable easier. Definitely, I have to say I really like
ads
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 and it is useful for our life. Nowadays, we can see many
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 everywhere. You can see it on TV, the internet, newspaper,banners,...Advertisements give us a deep impact through the story behind them. It gives us more information about products. You will see many famous people like actors,
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,… try to attract to buy a product they are trying to introduce to you.That brings more profitable to the companies and consumers.
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, you can go to websites or apps to buy many
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 in your country or over the world with a click. The company or store will bring the product to your house while you do something else or in another place. Even I bought my phone through an advertisement when I saw it on the internet. People have got less time these days and they are very quick in buying products. Advertisements are a faster way to find and buy something they are needing.
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 adverts
really
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 convenient for us but not thing is perfect. Maybe you can get
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 things when you order. You must try to find out and you will know what
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 bring to us. Eventually, I think
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 are giving us many
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. The convenience , profit or even interesting from shopping. I hope you will have more knowledge through my essay and not ban the advertisement. Thanks for your reading.

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