The number of people who are at risk of serious health problems due to being overweight is increasing. What is the reason for the growth of overweight people in society? How can this problem be solved?
Most
Add an article
The most
crowd
are getting serious well-being issues because of increasing statistics of Change to a plural noun
crowds
people
becoming obese. This
essay will mention as
the main reason is Correct word choice
that
of
not having enough Change preposition
apply
time
to cook as people
have time
before,so people
eat fast food
more often. This
could be solved by adding extra tax
to the fast-foodfood
restaurants.
Nowadays, society Correct your spelling
food food
good food
are
very busy that some of them have two full-Change the verb form
is
timetime
jobs and have Correct your spelling
time time
time-time
not
Correct your spelling
no
time
to cook at home which is easier to think of fast food
as the first
choice. Fast food
restaurants are often seen on every corner in the United
Correct your spelling
united
states
and they have really affordable prices that Change the capitalization
States
people
are harder to deny to consume. it is easier to get your food
by getting to the drive through
and you will have within 10 minutes warm and tasty Add a hyphen
drive-through
food
at very cheap prices. For example
: 90 per cent of American people
love to eat Carlos junior Hamburgers because are fast, tasty and cheap, so people
do not have to invest time
to cook at home. It is really easy to choose fast food
because the flavour, price and the portions are presented as extra sizes for the same inexpensive price. I disagree with this
type of fast food
because this
is unhealthy food
that will harm people
's health
in a very short time
.
These poor choice
of consuming fast Change the determiner
This poor choice
These poor choices
food
could be solved by adding an extra tax
on every fast food
restaurant so people
will have to think twice every time
they want to consume fast food
. It is not acceptable that citizens chose fast food
as the main source of food
because they will become obese and might present health
issues which
might end up on chronic diseases. These sick Correct pronoun usage
that
people
will depend on the health
system and the government will end up paying for their recovery by using citizens' money. For instance
, Int the United states is common to see obese people
suffering from hypertension due to poor food
choices in the past, so health
programs has
to treat these Change the verb form
have
peoplepeople
for the rest of their lives. Correct your spelling
people people
This
essay totally agrees to add extra tax
on fast food
to avoid obese statistic going up every year, so people
will be aware of this
health
issue.
To conclude, most of
Change preposition
apply
the
Correct article usage
apply
people
are tend to become every year more overweight due to consuming unhealthy food
such
as fast food
and this
issue might be solved by adding an extra tax
on all unhealthy grassy food
, so citizens might become more aware of this
health
issue.Submitted by cuevas14dic on
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