The number of people who are at risk of serious health problems due to being overweight is increasing. What is the reason for the growth of overweight people in society? How can this problem be solved?

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are getting serious well-being issues because of increasing statistics of
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becoming obese.
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the main reason is
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not having enough
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to cook as
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have
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before,so
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eat fast
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more often.
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could be solved by adding extra
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to the fast-
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restaurants. Nowadays, society
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very busy that some of them have two full-
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to cook at home which is easier to think of fast
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as the
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restaurants are often seen on every corner in the
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and they have really affordable prices that
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are harder to deny to consume. it is easier to get your
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by getting to the
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and you will have within 10 minutes warm and tasty
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at very cheap prices.
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love to eat Carlos junior Hamburgers because are fast, tasty and cheap, so
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do not have to invest
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to cook at home. It is really easy to choose fast
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because the flavour, price and the portions are presented as extra sizes for the same inexpensive price. I disagree with
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type of fast
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because
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is unhealthy
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that will harm
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's
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in a very short
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.
These poor choice
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of consuming fast
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could be solved by adding an extra
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on every fast
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restaurant so
people
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will have to think twice every
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they want to consume fast
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. It is not acceptable that citizens chose fast
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as the main source of
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because they will become obese and might present
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issues
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might end up on chronic diseases. These sick
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will depend on the
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system and the government will end up paying for their recovery by using citizens' money.
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, Int the United states is common to see obese
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suffering from hypertension due to poor
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choices in the past, so
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programs
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to treat these
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people people
for the rest of their lives.
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on fast
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to avoid obese statistic going up every year, so
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will be aware of
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health
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issue. To conclude, most
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the
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people
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are tend to become every year more overweight due to consuming unhealthy
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such
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as fast
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and
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issue might be solved by adding an extra
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on all unhealthy grassy
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, so citizens might become more aware of
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health
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issue.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • obesity
  • sedentary
  • caloric intake
  • genetics
  • nutritional awareness
  • processed foods
  • fast food
  • lifestyle diseases
  • preventative measures
  • tax incentives
  • urban planning
  • community gardens
  • wellness initiatives
  • dietary guidelines
  • physical fitness
  • calorie-dense
  • portion control
  • metabolic rate
  • health literacy
  • food deserts
  • work-life balance
  • junk food
  • BMI (Body Mass Index)
  • non-communicable diseases
  • food labeling
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