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The natural resources such as oil, forests and fresh water are being consumed at an alarming rate. What problems does it cause? How can we solve these problems?

#resources #oil #forests #water #rate
The reduction in the green cover has had a negative effect on
earth’s
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 weather conditions. To elaborate, forests help to maintain the temperature of
earth
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. The cutting down of trees at a fast pace for fulfilling human’s greed has created a climatic imbalance and the earth’s average temperature has risen by 2
degree
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degrees
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 Celsius in the
last
 ten years. One of the biggest consequences of global warming is that our summers are getting hotter and hotter.
Furthermore
, because of the depletion of
fresh
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water
 resources, people are now forced to buy drinking
water
. The poor and the weaker sections of
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society are the worst hit by the
water
 crisis.
Consequently
, many people are dying due to lack of drinking
water
 in African states and several others are left with only contaminated
water
 for their daily use. Depleting oil resources
also
 have had a negative impact on the automobile industry which relies almost wholly on oil for its operation.
However
, some viable solutions do exist and it is possible to solve the aforementioned problems to a great extent.
First
, cutting down of trees should be checked, and industries
which
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 use wood for manufacturing their products,
such
 as furniture and houses, should be encouraged to find eco-friendly alternatives.
Second
, the government and the media should launch campaigns that make people aware of the importance of saving
water
. It is
also
 important to set a limit on the amount of
water
 that can be used for domestic and industrial purposes.
Third
, scientists should be encouraged to find renewable fuels for vehicles.
For instance
, chargeable electric cars are gaining popularity in the US because they are eco-friendly and economical. In conclusion,
although
 the
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 consumption of natural resources has directly influenced the climate of
earth
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, the collaborative efforts of governments, scientists and the public can reduce the impact.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • non-renewable resources
  • economic instability
  • water shortages
  • agricultural production
  • deforestation
  • biodiversity
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • global warming
  • sustainable management
  • conservation
  • alternative energy
  • afforestation
  • reforestation
  • water conservation
  • responsible consumption
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