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children are currently having extra classes after normal lessons. what are the positive and negative effects? what is your opinion

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Parents nowadays always prepare a lot of extracurricular activities for their
children
such
 as music and sports
classes
 and foreign language course in their spare time. It is undeniable that equipped
children
 with more skills and abilities can enhance their competitiveness,
however
, depending on their mental condition and family background, it may not be a good practice. Some may say the effort has to make to become the best. To equip with more skills and abilities, youngs would have higher bargaining power and competitiveness when they grow up. They might be enabled to enter
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 university or get a job easier than the same age, and even become a professional, the top of the society with fortune and wealth. For some rich families, the above practice might seem easy,
however
, for some ordinary families, it might not be. Ordinary families might be able to afford some expenses for extra
classes
 as some tutorial schools could cost a few thousand more monthly. What's more,
children
 would be exhausted to handle more than 10 hours of school every day which they have to wake up at 7 for regular schooling plus 2-3 hours extra
classes
. The effectiveness would not be significant if the
children
 could not handle
such
 workload day by day.
Therefore
, in my view, the negative impacts of
children
 having extra
classes
 are outweighed by the positive. We should focus more on
children
 mental development than academic results.
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