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Many people say that smoking should be banned while others say it is not a good idea. What is your opinion on this?

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It is argued in some nations that smoking in public
places
 should be prohibited.
However
,there are opponents to the idea who think it is not needed .We will consider both sides of the discussion in
this
 essay. On the one hand,those who support the restriction of smoking promote that using
tabacco
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tobacco
Tabacco
 in
community
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the community
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 not only has
negative
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 impact on
people
's health who use it, but
also
 the smoke spread environment and affect to persons nearby.Scientists claim that the fumes have much more serious effects on someone who
stand
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next
 to the smoker.
Moreover
 ,there are a lot of
people
 in society who suffer from lung diseases
such
 as asthma,
bronchids
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bronchitis
 ,and even lung cancer ,so smoking lead to
gravest
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 health issues to some extent there is no remedy for these illnesses.
On the other hand
,some countries follow the rule that
people
 should have freedom on their choices ,so some
people
 believe that their personal right to smoke is much more important
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that
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than
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 other's rights to be healthy,
that is
 why it is acceptable to smoke in public
places
such
 as restaurants,hotels,offices. To sum up ,personally ,I would tend to side with the proponents of banning smoking cigarettes in social
places
,it is scientifically proven that passive smoking is as harmful as
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direct consumption of cigarettes.The health level of
population
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the population
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 is much more vital than their liking, and the government should not allow smoking in public
places
 even if some countries still allow that.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • negative health effects
  • personal freedom
  • illegal trade
  • smuggling
  • regulate
  • designated
  • non-smokers
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