Today more people are overweight than ever before. What in your opinion are the primary causes of this? What are the main effects of this epidemic?

Recently, our

society

is facing a big new

problem

.

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of

people

are overweight. A large

part

of

peoples

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people

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are

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concern

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by

this

trend.

This

problem

has different

causes

, and these

causes

have many effects. The principal reason

of

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this

trend is the development of fast-

food

chain

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. Nowadays a large

part

of the

society

wants to take a fast lunch.

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people

have

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not

lot

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a lot

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of money to spend

in

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food

. In fact, fast foods have these two qualities.

However

,

fast-

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fast food

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food

is not very good for health. In these

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restaurants

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restaurant

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dishes are fat and contain a

lot

of sugar.

In addition

, a

lot

of

people

and more particularly young

people

eat frequently in these places, but it’s not the best

habits

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to be developed. The

second

reason is

the

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sedentary of a large

part

of

population

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the population

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. In our

society

more

people

play video games, more

people

work at

distance

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and more

people

spend their time in

passive

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activity, as

watch

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film

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at home, especially young

people

.

Although

it does not concern all

people

,

but

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a large

part

. These activities make a sedentary

people

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person

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. To finish about

causes

, the development of delivery

food

application is the perfect example of

sedentary

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a sedentary

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lifestyle combined

to

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with

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the consummation of fast

food

. These different

causes

have many effects.

Firstly

,

eat

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eating

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a

lot

of sugar and

lot

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a lot

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of fat make a

problem

of obesity.

Furthermore

, obesity is linked to a sedentary lifestyle,

nut

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but

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if you do sport

activity

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activities

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frequently you can expend calories.

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,

one

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another

problem

is linked to obesity, its heart

problem

. In fact, overweight

people

are at risk of cardiac

arrets

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arrest

arrests

more than normal

people

. To finish overweight

people

are vulnerable to mental illness, because nowadays in our

society

the image is considered important. To conclude in our

society

for many years overweight are a new

problem

. Indeed,

this

problem

have

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different

causes

, like the development of fast

food

.

Also

,

sedentary

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a sedentary

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lifestyle

in

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is

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another one. Of course, these

causes

have many effects, like heart

problem

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problems

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or mental illness due to

the

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society

. Now and in the

future

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it’s one of the biggest

problematic

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problems

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of

the

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society

because I believe,

physic

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physical

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health is very important.