Today more people are overweight than ever before. What in your opinion are the primary causes of this? What are the main effects of this epidemic?

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is facing a big new

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.

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Lot

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of

people

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are overweight. A large

part

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of

peoples

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people

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are

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concern

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by

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trend.

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problem

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has different

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, and these

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have many effects. The principal reason

of

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this

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trend is the development of fast-

food

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chain

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. Nowadays a large

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of the

society

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wants to take a fast lunch.

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people

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have

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not

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lot

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a lot

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of money to spend

in

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on

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food

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. In fact, fast foods have these two qualities.

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,

fast-

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fast food

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food

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is not very good for health. In these

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restaurants

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restaurant

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dishes are fat and contain a

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of sugar.

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, a

lot

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of

people

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and more particularly young

people

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eat frequently in these places, but it’s not the best

habits

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to be developed. The

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reason is

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apply

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sedentary of a large

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of

population

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the population

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more

people

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play video games, more

people

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work at

distance

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a distance

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and more

people

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spend their time in

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activity, as

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film

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at home, especially young

people

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.

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it does not concern all

people

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,

but

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a large

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. These activities make a sedentary

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people

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person

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. To finish about

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, the development of delivery

food

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application is the perfect example of

sedentary

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a sedentary

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lifestyle combined

to

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the consummation of fast

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. These different

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have many effects.

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eat

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a

lot

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of sugar and

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lot

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of fat make a

problem

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of obesity.

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, obesity is linked to a sedentary lifestyle,

nut

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if you do sport

activity

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activities

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frequently you can expend calories.

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one

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another

problem

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is linked to obesity, its heart

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. In fact, overweight

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are at risk of cardiac

arrets

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arrest

arrests

more than normal

people

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. To finish overweight

people

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are vulnerable to mental illness, because nowadays in our

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the image is considered important. To conclude in our

society

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for many years overweight are a new

problem

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. Indeed,

this

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problem

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have

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different

causes

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, like the development of fast

food

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.

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,

sedentary

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a sedentary

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lifestyle

in

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another one. Of course, these

causes

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have many effects, like heart

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problem

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problems

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or mental illness due to

the

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apply

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society

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. Now and in the

future

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it’s one of the biggest

problematic

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problems

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of

the

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apply

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society

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because I believe,

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physical

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health is very important.