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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There are all kinds of
people
,
people
 who look for
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certain stability and avoid
change
 and others who look for these
changes
 and new opportunities thinking that they are usually good things. Thinking from the point of view of those who avoid
change
.
Change
 can be associated with uncertainty and there can be either a new opportunity or adversity in that
change
. Maintaining a stable lead wire and creating consistency throughout
life
 can be a good thing. If someone is in
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comfortable family
life
 and with a stable professional career, why make a
change
? It could be an unnecessary
change
. But
on the other
hand
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 it can
also
 be
limitative
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limitations
. Those
people
 who shy away from
change
 may be doing so out of fear or resentment and are resigning themselves to what they have
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, who knows, they might be happier if they had taken the risk. There are
also
 the opposite, those
people
 who believe that something good always comes from any
change
. These
people
 often try to live a more fulfilled
life
. They live with more emotion, in a constant search to reach new goals and targets. Accepting a
change
 well can bring new opportunities and in a way be very healthy. There may
also
 be
people
 who live in constant
change
 and
this
 can cause an unstable
life
. In my point of view, it is essential to accept the
changes
 as long as it is in a balanced and mature way.
Changes
 are part of
life
 and stagnating in my opinion can be quite demotivating. It is necessary for human beings to live motivated and seeking to achieve new goals and that can only be achieved with
change
. It could be small
changes
 that are not in our control.
Such
 as getting fired, or a family member dying, or a relationship breaking up. These are events that are part of living and that it is not possible to avoid. In conclusion, there will always be
people
 with greater adaptability than others. For
some
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 it is more difficult to face
changes
 but it turns out to be inevitable.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • status quo
  • stagnation
  • routine
  • comfort zone
  • predictability
  • specialization
  • innate
  • personal growth
  • adaptability
  • fast-paced
  • new horizons
  • equilibrium
  • progress
  • dynamic
  • transformation
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