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Advances in science and technology and other areas of sociery in the last 100 years have transformed the way we live as well as postponing the day we die. There is no better lime to be alive than now. To what extent do you agree or dissagree with this opinion?

#advances #science #technology #areas #sociery #years #lime #dissagree
The
improvment
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improvement
 in peoples'
knowledgies
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knowledge
 and
the
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technology
 during the
last
 few decades have a significant role in changing our
life
 and
delying
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delaying
dying
 our death
time
. Due to
this
, it can be argued that
this
 recent
time
 is the best
time
 to be alive. I take the view that we cannot judge that our
time
 is the best
time
 for living because the
next
 people may create things
make
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 their
life
 better. In
additon
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addition
, there are a few problems that the
technology
 brings which makes our
life
 not prefect that much.
To begin
 with, the
improvment
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improvement
 is part of
the
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life
, and the human raise will continue to
develope
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develop
.
In other words
, as we have new
technology
 and creative things that make us live in a better situation, the people who will live after us will
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create
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creat
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create
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 new things
can
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that can
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 make their
live
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lives
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 better than
our's
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ours
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.
Therefore
, we cannot say that living in today's
time
 is the best
time
 to be alive
in
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. Another point to put in mind, the
developent
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development
 in
technology
 is a
two-sided
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-
soward
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sword
. It is true that it gives as many creative solutions for our problems, but
on the other
hand
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 it brings new issues that cannot
be solve
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. To support
this
 claim, a research conducted by
University
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the University
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 of Bristol shows that since the
technology
's
revelotion
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revolution
revelation
 people are less happier
compair
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compared
compare
 to the previous generations. In
conclosion
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conclusion
,
the
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humanity will complete its progress which means that there will be a better
situaion
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situation
 than our situation.
Moreover
, it might
seems
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 that
this
pesent
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present
time
 is the best
time
 to live, but having better
techonogy
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technology
 doesn't mean
neccessarly
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necessarily
 that our
life
.
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