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The proportion of adult who owned digital devices in the U.S.A from 2004 to 2015.

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The given line graph gives information about the percentages of
people
 who
buyied
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buried
the
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digital devices in the U.S.A between the years 2004 and 2015. ,Clearly ,we can see the desktop is the only device which
is
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 widely bought in the years from 2004 to 2015. But there is a fluctuation on buying the laptop in the years 2008 to 2010. Coming to the year 2015 desktop is the only gadget owned by
the
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73% of the
people
. After desktop mostly buying
device
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 is E-book reader,
people
 started buying of
this
 device in the year 2009. In starting there is 2% of
people
 has bought and reached
to
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the height of 19% by facing the up and downs in 2012 and in 2014. the range of owning the tablet stats from 3% in the year 2010 and had continuous increase up to 45% in 2015.
Last
 but not the least, smartphones have the
heightest
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highest
 starting percentage of 35% in 2010 and gradually rise
peaked
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 height of 68% in 2015.
Smart phone
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 is
a
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second
 most owned gadget in the U.S.A . The
give
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 graph tells us about the percentage of
grown up
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people
 who owned the devices in the U.S.A .
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