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Advances in science and technology and other areas of sociery in the last 100 years have transformed the way we live as well as postponing the day we die. There is no better lime to be alive than now. To what extent do you agree or dissagree with this opinion?

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improvement in
people
 knowledge and
technology
 during the
last
 few decades have
significant
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 role in changing our
lives
 and dying our death
time
. Due to
this
, it can be argued that
this
 recent
time
 is
best
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time
 to be alive. I take a view that we cannot judge our
tim
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time
Tim
 is the best
time
 for living because the
next
people
 may create things which make their
lives
 better.
In addition
, there are a few problems that
technology
 brings which makes our life not perfect.
To begin
 with, the improvement part of our
lives
,
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 and human raises and continues to
develope
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develop
.
In other words
, as we have new technologies and creative thing that makes us alive in a better situation,
people
 who will live after us will create new thing
can
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 make their
lives
 better than
our
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.
Therefore
, we cannot say that living in today's
time
 is the best
time
 to live in. Another point to put in mind, the
developent
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development
 in
technology
 is a
two-sided
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-
soward
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sword
. It is true that it gives as many creative solutions for our problems, but
on the other
hand
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 it brings new issues that cannot
be solve
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. To support
this
 claim, a research conducted by
University
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the University
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 of Bristol shows that since the
technology
's
revelotion
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revolution
revelation
people
 are less happier
compair
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compared
compare
 to the previous generations. In
conclosion
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conclusion
, humanity will complete
it's
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 progress which means that there will be a better situation than our situation.
Moreover
, it might
seems
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 that
this
pesent
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present
time
 is the best
time
 to live, but having better
techonogy
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technology
.
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