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There is a trend in the 21 century in which people are turning to alternative healing like Ayurveda and homeopathy over allopathic medicine. Discuss the Advantages and disadvantages of this approach.

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modern society, people are
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turn-off to a different
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 to cure many
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 through naturopathy and herbal
medicine
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 over allopathic
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. Whereas many factories are contributing to disease emergence
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 of climate change, globalization due to that, many humans are affected by many non-identical
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, many of them believe that allopathic
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 has
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 more side
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 than others
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 which has provided harmless
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merits and demerits of alternative healing.
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, fewer side
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 or negligible side
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 from using these naturopathy medicines. Because those medicines are made of natural substances like plants, flowers and minerals.
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, people are often
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take holistic
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, which has provided non-dangerous
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 to humans.
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, the
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 option is a traditional
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 of cure and cheaper compared to the modern procedure.
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, Ayurveda
medicine
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 well-provided a permanent solution for many
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 and a minimal cost
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 has given without any surgical type treatments.
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, it has taken a longer duration to take cure the health issues.
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, it has lack
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scientific proof and research methodology to follow
homeopathy
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homoeopathy
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treatment
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 humans.
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,if cancer
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diseases
 they are not following the herbal
medicine
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 to control the affected cell spreading of whole human bodies.
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, the modern diagnostic facility is
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 essential
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 to heal specific
diseases
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 like cancer, brain injury, cardiological
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, and so on. To conclude
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, an ancient system of
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 can heal many
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, they are not much harmful to the people and are comparatively less invasive, cheaper cost, and
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 provide a non-surgical
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 of
treatment
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • holistic approach
  • allopathic medicine
  • homeopathy
  • Ayurveda
  • preventive measures
  • side effects
  • pharmaceuticals
  • scientific validation
  • regulation
  • peer-reviewed research
  • health risks
  • alternative therapies
  • conventional medicine
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