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Many people think that to become a sucessful specialist it is better to choose a career early in life and never change it later. to what extend do you agree with this view support your opinion with relevant examples.

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In the modern world, people believe that for becoming specialist they should plan career from childhood and if they change it later
then
 we never can be successful in life as well as most people believe that
,
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first
 we should focus on academic education after that they can choose their field
for example
 if someone wants to be a photographer so he can't start his career from the nursery. Meanwhile, many countries
work
 on it
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for example
 Israel is one of the popular countries in science they
work
 on their
children
 a lot than anyone else from childhood they start to
work
 on the mindset of their
children
 at an earlier age they choose their field and we can see they are the most intelligent in the world. There are on the ninth number in science in the world record list. In my opinion, we have to
work
 the same we should plan for our
children
 and we have to
work
 on it. Every person has their own interest we should analyse their mindset that what he or she wants to be and their parents and government have to
work
 on it. These days
children
 are very advanced they can easily use smart gadgets like computers and mobile phones, they have great learning skills and higher IQ levels than most adults.
For instance
, if you want your child to become a doctor
then
 you should try to get your
children
 interested in science from the beginning. To conclude, I agree with the view that to become a specialist, we should choose our careers from the beginning and never change them so we can be successful.
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