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In this mordern world it is possible to shop,work and communicate with people via the internet and live without any face to face contact with others.Is this a positive or negative devlopment?

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Advancement in technology in
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 modern world where everything is possible from shopping, working or even communicating with near
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 through the
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 and without connection they can live their life. I firmly agree with the statement and will provide pieces of evidence to support my point of view.
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, doing shopping or work from home through the
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 is becoming increasingly and
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 is because of people wants to buy real things without getting fake
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 ,
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, the original international product which only available through their trusted site.
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, working for office via the
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 is boosting because of the corona pandemic and it helped millions of crowd in the world.
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, communicating via the
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 is popular nowadays because loved ones from their family moved abroad for study or job purposes at that time
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 comes in handy to make themselves connect with
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 family and friends via video calls even living miles away.
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, there is always some negative effect of development happens like the biggest
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 is having time to meet their relatives or friends, people avoid doing that and do just calls or skype without live
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 to
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 conversation.
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 is because of the hectic schedule or else they hate to travel even just some kilometres. To conclude, as per my perspective
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 development has both pros and cons because it helps
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 to connect people apart from living far-away but
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 it makes them apart due to not meeting them
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 to
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 for a long time.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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