In many countries, the proportion of older people is steadily increasing. Does this trend have more positive or negative effects on the society?

With the advancement of technology,
death
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rate is decreasing and more
people
are staying healthy even in older age
hence
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old
people
in society. Some believe that it has
positive
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a positive
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impact while others are saying
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to it. In
this
essay, I will discuss both
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views and explain why it has more advantages than
disadvatages
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disadvantages
.
First
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major benefit of having
the
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older person at
home
is the responsibility. While youngsters are out for their work, grandparents at
home
would be able to look after the children.
Working
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generation can work without bothering about their kids and their activity classes.
For example
, nowadays kids have to attend multiple classes like
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, swimming other than school. Grandparents can help them with pick-up and drop-off
facility
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in the absence of their parents. Another reason is that they provide
the
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security at
home
and
this
keeps robbers away by knowing that someone is at
home
.
Hence
presence
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of aged
people
provide
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a great benefit to
the
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society.
On the other hand
, elder
people
are putting pressure
for
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their elderly care
specially
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when they fall sick and their son or daughter is working overseas.
For example
,
father
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the father
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of my best friend is living alone in his house because his son is working abroad.
Although
he is sending sufficient funds for his survival
but
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he
need
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to hire a nurse which is not easily available
everytime
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.
Rising
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The rising
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population of
this
generation is
also
resulting
into
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less
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fewer
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working
people
and
more
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retired generation. Because employers have openings for
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the fresh
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mind
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rather than old
people
. In conclusion,
Although
there are some negative points of having
growing
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a growing
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population of old
people
like
eldery
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elderly
elder
care and less number of
working
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the working
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population. Having grandparents at
home
help in many ways like child care and
home
safety.
Therefore
advantages outweigh
than
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the disadvantages of aged
people
in
the
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society.
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