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Some people think that cities are the best places to live. Others prefer to live in a rural area. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #cities #places #area
Nowadays
people
 move
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places
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place
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 to
places
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place
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 to find greener pasture.Mostly source of income is the reason
of
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for
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 moving.On the
othere
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other
hand
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 others prefer to stay in
rural
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a rural
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area
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areas
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 and maximize their resources in agricultural
areas
. Source of income is a common reason
of
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for
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people
moving
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move
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 from rural
areas
 to cities.Due to lack of job's to sustain basic needs
people
 try
thier
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their
 luck in the cities,as an
agrresive
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aggressive
abrasive
 approach and continues
industrilizatation
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industrialization
 of cities more jobs was offered.More often
people
 in rural
areas
 easly find hard work jobs
such
 as
contructions
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constructions
construction
 of buildings and other skilled work. On the
otherhand
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other hand
 others prefered to stay in rural
areas
,
reason
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the reason
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are
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 the polluted environment which is not good for
there
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their
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 health.They source out what nature have as part of their daily needs,fishing and agricultural work sustain their food supply. In
conclusion
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people
 has
different
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a different
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 perspective in choosing where they will stay.
Its
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It's
It is
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 on how you are comfortable and living in peace for
youre
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your
 stay in daily life.
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