Some people think that cities are the best places to live. Others prefer to live in a rural area. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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people
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places
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to find greener pasture.Mostly source of income is the reason
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moving.On the
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hand
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others prefer to stay in
rural
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area
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and maximize their resources in agricultural
areas
. Source of income is a common reason
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people
moving
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from rural
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to cities.Due to lack of job's to sustain basic needs
people
try
thier
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luck in the cities,as an
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approach and continues
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industrialization

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of cities more jobs was offered.More often
people
in rural
areas
easly find hard work jobs
such
as
contructions
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constructions
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of buildings and other skilled work. On the
otherhand
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others prefered to stay in rural
areas
,
reason
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are
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the polluted environment which is not good for
there
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health.They source out what nature have as part of their daily needs,fishing and agricultural work sustain their food supply. In
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perspective in choosing where they will stay.
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on how you are comfortable and living in peace for
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stay in daily life.
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