Some people think that there should be some strict controls about noise. Others think that they could just make as much noise as they want. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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everybody is free to do whatever they want. People want nobody to stop them.loud
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parties as well as high volume used for advertising and
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have any problem with that but others
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support
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will be writing about both of the sides and
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my opinion. On the one hand, high levels of volume are being a part of our
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.we can say that
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nobody can enjoy the party without loud
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to dance.
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is played in clubs and
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