Computers are now the basis of the modern world. They should therefore be introduced into classrooms, and their programs used for direct teaching purposes. However, dependence on computers in teaching may carry a certain degree of risk to students. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays, our personal lives are filled with electronic devices, that were unimaginable only a few years ago.
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an important technological source used by everyone during
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daily life is
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computer. It has become an issue of debate among people, whether classrooms should be equipped with
computers
, while others believe that
this
electronic machine may have some drawbacks on
students
.
To begin
, there are several advantages of learning through
computers
in classrooms.
Firstly
, gaining knowledge of a topic by means of audio-visual techniques could make the subject more appealing.
For example
, to understand design and geographical subjects, theories written in books are not enough,
students
need to use 3D maps and pictures, in order to have a real and concrete view of what they are studying.
Secondly
,
students
find
computers
useful for searching information more deeply about a particular subject in order to complete their coursework and assignments. ,
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if the information found through websites are coherent and acceptable for teachers,
students
could obtain good scores.
On the other hand
, overdependency on electronic gadgets might cause harmful effects on the physical and mental health of a student.
First
of all,
students
will always be dependent on
computers
for knowing about any type of information.
In other words
, they will not be able to think independently and always try to search for a solution.
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this
could cause a lack of cognitive skills and
moreover
ruin a student's educational career. Taking all of
this
into account, learning with
computers
could be useful for abstract subjects. But at the same time, teachers have to establish strict rules to limit hours of computer usage.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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