Computers are now the basis of the modern world. They should therefore be introduced into classrooms, and their programs used for direct teaching purposes. However, dependence on computers in teaching may carry a certain degree of risk to students. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, our personal lives are filled with electronic devices, that were unimaginable only a few years ago.

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an important technological source used by everyone during

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computer. It has become an issue of debate among people, whether classrooms should be equipped with

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, while others believe that

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electronic machine may have some drawbacks on

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, there are several advantages of learning through

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in classrooms.

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, gaining knowledge of a topic by means of audio-visual techniques could make the subject more appealing.

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, to understand design and geographical subjects, theories written in books are not enough,

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need to use 3D maps and pictures, in order to have a real and concrete view of what they are studying.

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find

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useful for searching information more deeply about a particular subject in order to complete their coursework and assignments. ,

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if the information found through websites are coherent and acceptable for teachers,

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could obtain good scores.

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, overdependency on electronic gadgets might cause harmful effects on the physical and mental health of a student.

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of all,

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will always be dependent on

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for knowing about any type of information.

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, they will not be able to think independently and always try to search for a solution.

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could cause a lack of cognitive skills and

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ruin a student's educational career. Taking all of

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into account, learning with

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could be useful for abstract subjects. But at the same time, teachers have to establish strict rules to limit hours of computer usage.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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