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Film stars and celebrities often share their views on public matters that have little to do with their profession. Is this a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays with the widespread acceptance of technology, the vast majority of
celebrities
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 and famous movie stars express their opinions about public issues
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 as economic constraints, unemployment crisis and health matters on social media. I personally believe that
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 trend has detrimental consequences for society.
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 with,
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 including singers, athletes and actors are very popular among
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.
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 they have a professional ability in their own vocations, they are not experts in all matters including public issues. An obvious example of
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 is the perspective of some well-known figures about vaccination against coronavirus. these
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 are anti-vaccinate. From their point of view, vaccination put our health in jeopardy.
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, when they share their viewpoints on social media, it leads to misleading
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 who follow them since these
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 are role models of them and their fans believe their opinions.
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,
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 are generally trustworthy persons whom
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 trust. if they share some viewpoints that are not professional and do not relate to their career, it will lead to distrust between
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 and them. due to the fact that individuals think that well-known artists and athletes
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 of focusing on improving their abilities just want to become more famous and earn more money through interfering in public issues. In conclusion,
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celebrities
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 have a significant influence on
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’s lives, my firm conviction is that sharing their perspectives about various matters not only has a negative impact on society but
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 leads to destroying reliance between society and famous
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.

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