In many countries the level of crime is increasing and crimes are becoming more violent. Why do you think this is and what can be done about it?
Nowadays,
people
are committing more and more violent crimes in developing nations. Why do these convicts attempt such
henious
Correct your spelling
heinous
offence
? Is it because of Fix the agreement mistake
offences
zero
tolerance level or the class system? It turns out, that both these reasons cause violent felonies and some measures can be taken to control them.
Correct article usage
the zero
Firstly
, people
today have decreased patience level
, which means that they become angry or frustrated quickly and do not tolerate things that are unfavourable. Fix the agreement mistake
levels
For example
, a man who comes home,
sees that his wife is cheating on him with another man and instantly shoots his wife and her lover out of sheer anger. The culprit does not get the time to cool down; Remove the comma
apply
therefore
, he attempts this
homicide. Secondly
, the
society is divided into various classes because of income inequality. The rich are becoming richer and the poor are becoming poorer. Correct article usage
apply
Such
underpriviliged
members are unable to meet basic needs for their family and are forced to commit violations like theft, Correct your spelling
underprivileged
burglery
or murder. In short, the convict is found guilty because of the circumstances around him or her.
Correct your spelling
burglary
However
, such
violence should to
be taken into account so that we can reduce Change the verb form
apply
these anti-social behaviour
. To decrease the frustration level, Change the determiner
this anti-social behaviour
people
must learn to control their anger and start to let go their
pain. Change preposition
of their
For instance
, if we consider the man in the above example, after watching the scene, he could have thrown his wife and her lover out of his house and could have given her a divorce. In this
way, he does not have to commit the crime of passion. The best way to control one's anger is by performing yoga and meditation. In addition
, there should be no difference in wealth among people
so that
concept of rich and poor is eradicated. Everyone has the right to earn and should be given equal wages as Correct determiner usage
the
this
may reduce robbery and murder assualts
.
To conclude, the environment and surroundings play a major role in criminology. Correct your spelling
assaults
People
should try to remain calm and the
society should only develop the concept of Correct article usage
apply
single-class
background system. Add an article
a single-class
This
will not only decrease the crime rate but also
make a country free of crimes.Submitted by manjyot_k88 on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Your opinion
Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.
If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.
Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:
...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?
Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+
Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!