The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain in the health care system in an effort to deal with the health issues involved . Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the school curriculum . To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Health

problems,

for

instance

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obesity, are thought by some to have a detrimental effect on the individual

people

as well as society and

health

care departments .The only way to tackle

this

problem is by increasing physical education among citizens . I completely agree with the solution provided in the statement . My views are discussed in the following paragraphs.

Firstly

, dealing with the issues of increasing obesity and weight problems is best solved by taking a long term approach to

exercise

and physical fitness.

This

method will ensure that future generations will be healthier and will not have

health

problems .

However

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encouraging extracurricular

sport

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activities in the schools will undoubtedly make students fit and active.Schools should add an extra class for yoga in the morning and make it mandatory for everyone to attend class .

Secondly

,

exercise

is not only the solution to the obesity problem . There are many more factors

such

as eating habits (junk foods) and sleeping cycle.

People

should improve their eating patterns by opting

diets

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and eating only fresh. Taking an average amount of sleep is

also

required for a healthy lifestyle .

This

can be achieved by providing healthy lifestyle curriculums in schools to students and they can pass

this

information to their families. Moving

further

, there are many advantages of

exercise

but its downsides cannot be ignored.While doing

exercise

many

people

stretch their body beyond

limit

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which results in back pain and bone injuries.

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some

people

get obsessed with diets and start losing extra weight which is not good for

health

too. In conclusion, adding more physical lessons

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school

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syllabus will greatly help in improving the

health

of

people

.

However

, eating habits should be in control to keep one physically fit and active.