some people believe that children leisure activities must be educational, otherwise they are complete waste of time. Do you agree or disagree

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A common saying does say " all work and no play makes
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a dull boy". It is thought by some that pupils
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activities
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must be educational,
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is a complete waste of time. I would disagree with
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statement because
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learn and do better when they are engaged in play and
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during
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. In recent times, education has become a priority for many parents seeking to secure a good future for their
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. They believe
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leisure
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activities
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should be educational after academics in school.
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will increase their chances of admission to
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higher
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and eventually get a high paying job. When
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leisure
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activities
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are basically educational, they will be retentive of what they learnt in school.
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, the
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that educational
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; debate,quiz etc. during
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aid learning.
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reinforcement aid learning and help
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to perform better in their academics.
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,
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leisure
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activities
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should involve play and
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. It is important to remember
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need to develop life skills. What better way, than through
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as sports,
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and play with other
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. These
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are far from being a waste of time for the
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.
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, many schools after introducing play and
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such
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as chess, crickets, football etc. discovered it does not only improve concentration but
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helps develop
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and critical thinking skills among
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. Research has shown that the population ratio of
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who engage in play and
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during
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perform better academically
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those who don't. It was discovered that play and
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during
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time has helped students to be sound and more conversant with other aspects of life.For
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,
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in sports
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responsibility, leadership and other life skills .Practical knowledge of
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increase
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when they are involved in extracurricular
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. ***Famous scientists like Albert Einstein engaged in
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extra curricular
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activities
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rather than only academics.*** It is important to remember,
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need to relax after their academic
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. When
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are all for educational or academic relevance, they werry and tire of studying.
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