Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful. Others disagree. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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While submitting a job application, personal

data

is asked by the

employers

to know about their entertainment and family

details

. While others argue that personal

information

’s are not beneficial to the companies. In

this

essay, I will argue both sides of view and provide my support.

To begin

with, the

employers

are asking their works family

information

and personal interest to support their personal needs

such

as arranging games, providing discounted tickets and any other benefits related to their families.

For instance

, in 2019 Thales Canada inc, collected their staff's

details

while recruiting and sent enormous discounted tickets to their staff members to enjoy their vocations, as a ,

result

Add the preposition

inresult

fromresult

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the company productivity significantly increased in 2020 around 15% because of the offered tickets and

also

the members stress released 50%. Having their own staff’s

information

could be useful for a company to increase productivity.

On the other hand

, critic’s believes that the individual’s

data

are not beneficial to the companies because it is not useful.

Moreover

, the

details

are breached and misused by the hacker to steal their family

information

As a result

, the hacker could identify the personal

details

and trap him in different ways. On top of ,that the family members could be in trouble when they know about the issues.

Therefore

, the individual’s

data

should not be shared with their

employers

. In conclusion, private companies are asking their workers for

information

to reduce stress and increase productivity.

However

, in my ,opinion personal

data

should not be shared with their

employers

to stay away from hackers who want to give trouble on their personal life.

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4Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Grammar mistakes
 

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267 words

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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hobbies and interests
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