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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph given demonstrates the
porportion
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proportion
 of new grades who did the final high school test and passed on it, dividing
in
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 girls and boys as well as illustrating each subject. Overall, it's clearly evident that female students got better results in almost all of
modules
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, except one of them, Geography.
In addition
, both
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sexes obtained good grades in
Foreing
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Foreign
 Languages, which were French, Spanish and German.
Furthermore
, there were similarities in four pass rates which both of genders
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presented
 modest difference, despite all of
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 were overcame by women. Those were Physics, History, Mathematics and
Foreing
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Foreign
 Languages, whose the biggest disparity was around 2,5% in History and the lowest one was 0,6% in Languages module.
However
, it's
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possible
 to see a considerable
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relevance
 in
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the supremacy
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 of young
woman
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women
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 who passed in Chemistry and Computer science, which their percentage reached heightened
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, in comparison with male students, at 30,2% and 56,2%, respectively.
On the other hand
, guys obtained a proportion in rates of 30,4% in Geography, almost 10% more than girls.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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