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In the future, we will have more and more leisure time as machines will replace many of the tasks we do at home and work now. Discuss the benefits this will bring and also the problem it will cause.

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It is undeniable fact that modern technology has changed the global village in every economic and social field. Due to increasing machinery ,items some crowd of the nation get free time and some of them unemploy by modernisation. There are several reasons for
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 problem, and various solutions could be taken by governments and individuals to overcome
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 situation.
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, machines are part of our daily life which are helpful in many ways.
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, In the Industrial sector, cope-up demands and supplies in the nation. It is advisable to improve
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 and quality of the product.
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, we observed Covid-19 badly affected all over the world and overcome
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 situation, vaccination is essential to every citizen of any country. In India, which is the
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-highest population in the world. the data released by the government depicted that around four-fifths of people are vaccinated in the nation with the help of machines and technological equipment. In
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 aspect machinery
item
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 do outperform.
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, machinery tools are used to raise
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standard
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 of livings,
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 as entertainment
purpose
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purposes
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, like television, mobile applications, Air conditioners and vehicles but there are several drawbacks like people addicted to some
application
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 they waste their valuable time and in some
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 they listen songs sometimes they meet an accident or get injured. It is
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 noticeable things machines created unemployment issues in
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 sector.
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 expand the business. businessmen cut labour costs and move surge to technical equipment. In conclusion, despite some obvious reasons, people should use
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modernisation and technical equipment.
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, they should have moment management skills to use to improve their lifestyle and use their leisure time in social activities or in the gym.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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