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nowadays many people choose to be self employed rather than work for a company or organization. why might this be the case? what could be the disadvantage of being self employed?

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We live in an age where many
of
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individual wants
business
 ownership rather than working under
company
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a company
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.
This
 can cause a number of disadvantages for both
individual
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individuals
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 and
economy
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the economy
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 . I will support
this
 view with arguments in
following
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the following
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 paragraphs.
To begin
 with , there are several pores of
self employment
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self-employment
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.
first
 and foremost being
entrepreneur
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an entrepreneur
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 has
risk
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a risk
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 of failure and loss in their
business
. There is
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a well
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well known
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 term in studies of
business
 that "
business
 is
not
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no
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bed
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 of roses".
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Businessmen
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Businessman
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A businessman
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 can face loss in
his
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business
 which cannot be easy to bear.
this
 might lead to Vanish future of people who are owners of a firm. While
,
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 working for companies is totally different ownership. Being employees they are free from stress in case
company
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the company
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 face
lack
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 of success because they get their salary on time without any
misloying
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mislaying
Moreover
, many people apply for bank
loan
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loans
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 for starting
own
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their own
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company
 with higher interest rates but in many
cases
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 they
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are enable
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enable
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unable
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 to handle
business
 and which results to face bankruptcy. while
,
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working as
a
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staff didn't need any investment .
Furthermore
, anyone can work as
the
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 employee in
company
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a company
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 with having
businesses
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business
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 study background but, entrepreneurship
need
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 specific
Business
 Study courses which are not affordable for everyone and
also
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are also
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lot
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 of
time consuming
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. To more explain here is
clear
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 example that
business
 entrepreneur study cost approximately 10 to 20 lakh in
india
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 with 5 year time period.
This
 amount is affordable for every class of
economy
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the economy
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. In nutshell, there is no denying that working for oneself has
number
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a number
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 of side effects
however
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, working under
company
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a company
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 is free from any kind of risk and investment.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • flexibility
  • freedom
  • pursue
  • passion
  • interest
  • income
  • financial success
  • control
  • working hours
  • work-life balance
  • empowerment
  • ownership
  • job security
  • stability
  • financial challenges
  • isolation
  • social interaction
  • self-discipline
  • motivation
  • deadlines
  • supervisors
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