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Establishing good relationships in the workplace is not important as the primary goal of every person is to focus on work. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

#relationships #workplace #person #focus #work
Individuals have
great
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 opportunity to observe and learn manifold things at
workplace
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the workplace
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 as they meet
various
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the various
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type
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types
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 of people there. It is
belief
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the belief
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 that being friendly at
workplace
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the workplace
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 is not necessary because
most
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the most
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 conspicuous thing is only on performance as well as productivity for
everyone
. I
am completely disagree
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 with
this
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viewpoint
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view point
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viewpoint
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 and the reasons will be discussed below. To commence with, the major reason behind my disagreement
is disputes
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 between co-workers as
everyone
 has different nature and way of doing
work
 and if workers will not communicate properly and cooperate with each
others
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other
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then
 they will not be able to find solutions
of
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to
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 obstacles at
workplace
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the workplace
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, not even expect to get help if they have any kind of quarry. In
such
 situations, people will be
agressive
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aggressive
an
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and
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 jealous of each other which creates arguments. To
examplify
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exemplify
 it, if
junior
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the junior
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 worker needs help in any new
work
 but he does not have
good
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a good
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 bonding with his co-workers
then
 he will try to do it by himself in his own way
then
 he will create
mess
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a mess
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 which can result bad for
company
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the company
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. So, making good relationships is very important. Moving
further
 to
second
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 reason, there is no doubt that every person has various
specialiies
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specialities
 and superior qualities. Employees meet new people at
work
 while they have
chance
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 to learn from others and gain new
techniqes
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techniques
of
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work
. It is quite necessary for
everyone
 to make good relations with every worker.
Moreover
, it creates positive vibes and
goood
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good
surrondings
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surroundings
.
Everyone
 will enjoy doing
work
.
Hence
,
work
 can be done perfectly if
their
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 is unity in employees. To conclude
it
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,
i
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am not agree
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 with the thought that
work
 should be
first
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the first
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 priority at
workplace
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the workplace
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instead
 of making good connections with co-workers because
work
 will not be done with bad behaviour and without making
everyone
 feels comfortable.
Thus
, being nice to
everyone
 play
important
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an important
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 role
at
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workplace
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the workplace
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.
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