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Establishing good relationships in the workplace is not important as the primary goal of every person is to focus on work. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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Individuals have
great
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 opportunity to observe and learn manifold things at
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workplace
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the workplace
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 as they meet
various
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the various
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type
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types
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 of people there. It is
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the belief
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 that being friendly at
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workplace
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the workplace
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 is not necessary because
most
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the most
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 conspicuous thing is only on performance as well as productivity for
everyone
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. I
am completely disagree
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 with
this
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viewpoint
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view point
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 and the reasons will be discussed below. To commence with, the major reason behind my disagreement
is disputes
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 between co-workers as
everyone
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 has different nature and way of doing
work
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 and if workers will not communicate properly and cooperate with each
others
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then
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 they will not be able to find solutions
of
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 obstacles at
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workplace
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the workplace
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, not even expect to get help if they have any kind of quarry. In
such
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 situations, people will be
agressive
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aggressive
an
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 jealous of each other which creates arguments. To
examplify
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exemplify
 it, if
junior
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the junior
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 worker needs help in any new
work
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 but he does not have
good
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a good
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 bonding with his co-workers
then
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 he will try to do it by himself in his own way
then
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 he will create
mess
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 which can result bad for
company
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the company
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. So, making good relationships is very important. Moving
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 to
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second
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the second
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 reason, there is no doubt that every person has various
specialiies
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specialities
 and superior qualities. Employees meet new people at
work
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 while they have
chance
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a chance
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 to learn from others and gain new
techniqes
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techniques
of
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work
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. It is quite necessary for
everyone
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 to make good relations with every worker.
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, it creates positive vibes and
goood
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good
surrondings
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surroundings
.
Everyone
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 will enjoy doing
work
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.
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,
work
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 can be done perfectly if
their
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 is unity in employees. To conclude
it
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apply
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,
i
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am not agree
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 with the thought that
work
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 should be
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first
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the first
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 priority at
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workplace
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the workplace
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instead
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 of making good connections with co-workers because
work
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 will not be done with bad behaviour and without making
everyone
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 feels comfortable.
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, being nice to
everyone
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 play
important
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an important
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 role
at
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in
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workplace
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the workplace
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.

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