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Establishing good relationships in the workplace is not important, as the primary goal of every person is to focus on work. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

#relationships #workplace #person #focus #work
Mutual-understanding
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 among the employees
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 a crucial role in any organisation.
However
, it is
considerded
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considered
 by some people that on
work
 our
first
prority
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priority
 will be to complete our task with dedication rather than to make personal relationships with the employees at
work
. I partially agree with
this
 statement which
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 would like to discuss in upcoming paragraphs. To commence with, making
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good friends at
workplace
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the workplace
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 are essential because they help us to finish our
work
 not only quickly but
also
 qualitatively .
For instance
, if we are going to
work
 in teams as a
teammembers
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team members
than
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then
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 it will be easy for us to complete
plethora
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 of tasks
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specific
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a specific
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 time limit.
Otherwise
, if we can
work
 separately
than
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then
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 it would take more time and we will be less productive. On the other side, if people would waste
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all time
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to make
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 friends at
work
then
 how will they focus on their
work
.
Instead
 of keeping their mind on tasks, they always become busy
to plan
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 the outside meetings after
work
.
Thus
,
this
behavior
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behaviour
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 may affect the quality as well as productivity of the organisation which may
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affect
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effect
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 the reputation of the company.
Hence
, it is recommended our
first
 goal should be to focus on
work
instead
 of making bosom friends. In a nutshell, to
work
 in a team, it is mandatory to have a mutual understanding between the team members but sometimes their personal relationships might put
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 effect on the production of
organisation
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an organisation
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.
Thus
, it is recommended, the relationships between employees are
neccesary
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necessary
 but to certain limits because their main destination is to complete their tasks.
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