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Some people think that it is more effective for students to study in a group, while others believe that it is better to study alone. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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 students have to work harder in order to gather good grades as well as to achieve
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 future. Many believe that if pupils can study in a group it will help them to ace in their respected subjects. Whereas, others oppose
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 line of thinking and prefer to study alone. If I have to pen down my opinion I will agree with the
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 that studying with others can be more effective and I will discuss
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 in the upcoming paragraphs. In today's world, it is quite impossible to gain success without tremendous efforts and proper knowledge regarding
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beginning
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 lives. Where children need to understand everything in
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 and with practical
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, sometimes it's troublesome for the educator to provide unbroken attention to the individual students. In which situation group studies can provide a great deal in the solution of
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, which is quite similar when it comes to different students. Where
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 child is better in a specific subject,
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other can ace
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 in a different
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, if they share their knowledge with
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,
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 certain personality traits,
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 sharing, kindness, leadership attitude, social skills and many more. These will ultimately push them towards
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 future as
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 will
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 their interactions skills too. There are some
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 who nurture contradictory
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 about
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 process and think that studying alone is better for learning. For them when a person
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 by himself it provides him
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 opportunity to avoid distraction, which could be a major problem when there are more than 2
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, when there is any task that includes solving a problem, different
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 might represent
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 and an
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atmosphere
 of divergence may arise. In conclusion, I will reiterate my thoughts that studying with a bunch of
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 with relaxation as
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 does spare us from
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 stress and monotony and
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 improves our
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 nature.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • collaborative learning
  • peer feedback
  • social interaction
  • deep understanding
  • group dynamics
  • personalized learning
  • self-discipline
  • concentration
  • diverse perspectives
  • isolation
  • motivation
  • peer support
  • groupthink
  • distractions
  • commitment
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