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Many people assume that the goal of every country should be to produce more materials and goods To what extend do you agree or disagree that constantly increasing production is an appropriate goal

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A majority of people believe that producing more products has to be
one
 of the important aims for each
country
. In
this
 essay, we will analyse the effects of permanent production increment
however
 I agree with
this
 attitude to a great extent. On
one
 hand, manufacturing a lot of products makes
one
country
 independent
that is
 very helpful and might be an achievement for a
country
 if they adopt appropriate policies.
For instance
, Iran considered producing a great number of tomatoes and exporting to other
countries
 but they did not pay sufficient attention to
water
 resources and finding cultivated agricultural fields. Unfortunately, due to inappropriate management, most of the
water
 resources are wasted and nowadays Iranian encounter strict
water
 issues whereas some deprived cities like Zahedan and Ahvaz do not have healthy
water
 for drinking.
On the other hand
, if there is excellent management, producing new goods and exporting them to other
countries
 make your
country
 needless to other
countries
 because your
country
 becomes independent and attain the highest level of economic promotion. If
one
country
 gains financial resources through a booming economy, it could reach the highest level in the aspect of technology.
For example
, Netherlands export a climbing number of Roz flowers to other
countries
 and get a lot of money whereas we witness
this
country
 employ
this
 invest in other fields like physics, chemistry, computer and things like that that it has attained a lot of accomplishment through
this
 way. By the way of conclusion, producing more products is a significant aim if the government consider suitable policies that can turn that
country
 into an independent
country
 and turn it from a developing
country
 into a developed
country
.
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