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New technologies and ways of buying and selling are transforming the lives of consumers. To what extent do you agree with this opinion?

#technologies #lives #consumers
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In the modern era, Individuals, like adults, turn on the television or flip through the pages of a newspaper, they see that society is drawing some distinctions between technologies. As result, a fair number of
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 believe that
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 should use
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, while others take the view that focusing on
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 without
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 is more important. Speaking for myself, I wholeheartedly agree with the
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 has some unique values.
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 of all, it is undeniable that
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 could
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effectively
 save time in society. The most compelling reason is
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 , computers , and Ipad. There is ample evidence to suggest that all the
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 in North America are depending on
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 in everything. Take Canadian society,
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, Thousands of
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nations
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 from Canada are selling and buying items online without going to shop. what's more, folk will not need to drive to any places what makes them
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alot
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a lot
 of time.
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, there is another reason why I agree with the idea is
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 can protect
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 from
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Germs
. As we know, Covid-19 spread by air what makes
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life hard for people. Numerous studies have
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 found that 95% of people are using
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 to save themselves from going outside.
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, without
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 people will not be able to learn or move up during any pandemic. Most importantly, the
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 lead to a better life for students.
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 will be
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 and learn new things about life.
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, Students who are using
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technology
 during their studies end up with higher grades.
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, these three ideas will help the
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government
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. All in all, in light of the aforesaid factors, I am firmly convinced that having
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technology
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 on themselves are essential parts for
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 in their own way.
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; priority should be given to
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technology
. Personally, I reckon that activity without
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, it will make the world worse in the future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • transforming
  • consumers
  • buying and selling
  • new technologies
  • revolutionized
  • consumer experience
  • e-commerce
  • convenience
  • range of options
  • mobile payment systems
  • transactions
  • challenges
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