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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. The only way to reduce the amount of traffic in cities today is by reducing the need for people to travel from home for work, education or shopping. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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Never before in history, have there been enormous traffic congestion as of right now. The development in the industries and technologies
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 has improved the economy, thereby
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 the number
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or
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 private vehicles.
As a result
, few ethnic groups assume that
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 the reduction in the
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usage of vehicles for work, education and shopping, is the sole solution to
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However
, I believe that there are other methods to curtail the issue of traffic blocks.
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To begin
 with, there are
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 of reasons for the excessive usage of automobiles on roads.
Firstly
, Consumerism, the byproduct of globalisation, has exploited the
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 for
status
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the status
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 of an individual to
makes
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 them
purchased
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the
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unneccesary
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unnecessary
 products.
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, nowadays, in every home, it tends to own more than one car for each individual.
Secondly
, the lack of
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 designed roads and traffic systems creates notable issues.
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installation
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 of poorly designed control systems burdens the movement
further
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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